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reddevilleanne
Joined: 20 Oct 2004
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Location: Nottingham
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:15 pm Post subject: 2 of my poems |
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I wrote these when I was 8 and 9 for a competition at school. Both of them got published in seperate books. Tell me what ya think to em. :)
A beautiful flower:
Wonderful smooth seed,
put into the ground
put smelly mud over it.
Leave it for a month
Whoosh!
There it goes
into the air
over a could
in to the sky
Snap!
(8 y/o)
Animals, animals, animals:
Hasty animals
tasty animals
too big to be hidden
too small to be ridden.
Sometimes a reminder
a fee for the finder
will help
the ridden
to stay hidden.
(9 y/o)
They're pretty rubbish I know, but werent bad considering my age :-D |
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Mullin
Joined: 16 Aug 2004
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Location: Ivybridge
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:16 pm Post subject: |
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| Aww bless! They are quite good for an 8 year old! Well done chick!! |
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reddevilleanne
Joined: 20 Oct 2004
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Location: Nottingham
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:19 pm Post subject: |
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Thank ya! :)
I like the second one best :-D |
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Mullin
Joined: 16 Aug 2004
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Location: Ivybridge
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:23 pm Post subject: |
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| Yeah me to! |
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reddevilleanne
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Location: Nottingham
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:32 pm Post subject: |
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| Hehe, I showed my teacher today and she was well impressed :lol: |
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Mullin
Joined: 16 Aug 2004
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Location: Ivybridge
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:32 pm Post subject: |
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| Aww bless coolios!! |
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reddevilleanne
Joined: 20 Oct 2004
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Location: Nottingham
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 12:45 pm Post subject: |
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| She said ''Leanne, you shouldnt be wasting such a talented brain!'' :lol: |
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Macs34
Joined: 25 Mar 2004
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Location: Kenya
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 3:35 pm Post subject: |
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Pingu wrote:
She said ''Leanne, you shouldnt be wasting such a talented brain!'' :lol:
I think She was right! |
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Mullin
Joined: 16 Aug 2004
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Location: Ivybridge
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 3:42 pm Post subject: |
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| Ha ha yeah! |
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reddevilleanne
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Tue May 24, 2005 3:43 pm Post subject: |
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| Hehe :-D |
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Macs34
Joined: 25 Mar 2004
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Location: Kenya
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Wed May 25, 2005 6:45 am Post subject: |
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| No really yo should stop wasting it! ** clearing voice** listen en if yo dont stop yo are going to answer to me!!! :-D |
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Mullin
Joined: 16 Aug 2004
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Location: Ivybridge
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Wed May 25, 2005 8:37 am Post subject: |
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| Thats told you leanne!! |
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reddevilleanne
Joined: 20 Oct 2004
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Location: Nottingham
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Wed May 25, 2005 11:00 am Post subject: |
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| Lol! I aint wasting it! |
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Macs34
Joined: 25 Mar 2004
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Location: Kenya
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Wed May 25, 2005 3:18 pm Post subject: |
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| Good!! Now repeat after me: - "I am not going to wast my talent any more! " bow down and leave the stage!! :-D |
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reddevilleanne
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| Tell a Friend Posted: Wed May 25, 2005 3:21 pm Post subject: |
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| Yes Macs, whatever you say. |
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